Advice for your Med School Personal Statement

So not to toot my own horn, but toot, toot. When I want to be, (ie. not when I'm blogging or writing lame-o "fear essays") I am a very good writer. Especially when it comes to personal statements. How do I know this? For the following reasons:

1) I've been told in interviews that my PS was in the top 5% of the ones the interviewer had ever read.

2) My friends recommend me out to their friends to write/help/edit their PS's

3) Friends have reported back to me that their interviewers complimented their personal statements.

4) Essays I've written have received interviews at Harvard, Mayo, UCLA, Yale, UPenn, NYU, Mt. Sinai, etc.

So TOOT TOOT!!

Anyway, I'm done bragging but here's my advice.

1. If you know you suck at writing, or are even an average writer, seek help. Get a 2nd opinion and a 102nd opinion. Spell check. Grammar. And lose the freaking run-on sentences. Also, do a word frequency check (by eye). Did you use the same word 18 times in your essay? Did you say "I believe that" 3 times in one paragraph. Fix that. It's super annoying to readers.

2. Pick one direction, go with it. It's the worst to read a completely unorganized essay. Beginning with story 1, jumping to advice your father gave you, then describing your childhood dreams, then jumping to story 2, then describing your dog. Blah blah blah.

3. If you accomplish nothing else in your essay, demonstrate the following two things. 1) you UNWAVERING commitment to whatever you are applying for and why you want to do it, and 2) demonstrate your capabilities in the MOST HUMBLE POSSIBLE WAY. Any hint that this is anything less than your dream job is going to be a red flag. That and being an egotistical a-hole.

4. What you want to do is construct an interesting NARRATIVE that your reader will continue reading until the end. Cliche as it may seem, a story is always best because it makes your reader interested. The LAST thing you want is your Ad-com officer to be mentally exhausted and or irritated from trying to follow an illogical essay or just from TRYING to get to the end. Write a story (true or made up) in which you can weave all your cool little details into.

5. Your essay is not the time to describe every attribute about yourself in complete detail. The idea is to weave in interesting tidbits that will make your reader want to reference your application and look it over more closely. Like "Wow, how did this guy learn Farsi?"... or "Wait, this chick is 24 and she spent 3 years in Djibouti teaching... how is that possible?". If you do it correctly you will effectively coerce your reader to investigate your application more thoroughly instead of just giving it a once over.

6. Use this checklist to make sure you haven't done anything grossly offensive

• Did you come off egotistical?
• Do you put ANYONE down in your essay? Stupid professors, unsupportive counselors, etc. This is a no-no.
• Do you blame ANYONE except yourself for weak spots in your application? This is bad. For example, there is a difference between saying that your grades in college were sub-par because you were splitting energy between school and your full-time job vs. blaming your crappy grades on the fact that your parents cut you off from parental scholarship and you were forced to get a job.
• Is there ANYTHING that can be interpreted as racist, sexist, political, or religious? You should probably lose that stuff.
• Ok, here's a big one. Do you even HINT that you are interested in your chosen field because of money? Meaning you use the phrase "I really enjoy the lifestyle that medicine will afford me"? Definitely LOSE THAT. That's a BIG RED FLAG, BLACK BALL, whatever you want to call it.
• Do you mention that you are going into field X because your parents want you to? Or because your dad is also an X, and you want to be one too?
• Are you overstating your qualifications? Don't make your shadowing experience seem like you were doing lumbar punctures. Everyone on the ad-com will know you're a liar. Or at least a severe exaggerator.
• Name dropping. That's lame.

Here's some great stuff to include if you can:

• Foreign language abilities
• Clinical experiences
• Pre-med moments which made you REALLY want to be a doctor, or moments that made you really uncomfortable
• Your family status. You don't have to, but I think mentioning your kids or spouse is often indicative of your maturity and the diversity you will bring to the class
• teaching experience - adcoms love this. teachers make great learners
• international experiences
• demonstrating that you aren't a stress-basket

Ok, that's all for now. Good luck!