Does this reference sound good. 10 points best answer.?

ok, iv never done a reference before and my mate asked me to do one for her. does this sound allright? tips would be nice. anything missing. anything else i can add to make her chances getting the job easier. she is trying to get into the british army as a dental nurse. address phone number her name - d.o.b I have known Zadie as a friend since she was aged 10. I've known Zadie through her family for approximately 8 years. Zadie has always mentioned wanting to become a soldier since i've known her. it has only been the last couple of years that she has spoken about wanting to become a dental nurse. Zadie is motivated and an enthusiastic young person who is keen to impress others but also very ambitious to gain vocations and to progress positively in a career. Zadie is a competitive and committed in everything that she undertakes. At times Zadie can be seen as over ambitious and needs to 'slow down.'She has great communicaton skills and gets along with everyone, from the very young to elderly. She is a very gental, caring person also. zadie enjoys working with people and her pleasant personality inspires others. Zadie is pleasant and likeable young person who is easily approachable, she is determined to succeed and i believe she will if given the opportunity. She is a hard worker who loves to learn, who works great as a part of a team. She is very capable and now needs the opportunity to develop the necessary skills to become a soldier/dental nurse. I have no hesitation to recommend Zadie for the training as royal army dental corps - soldier. Signed: . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . Date: . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . full name - work it looks a bit untidy cuz i just copy/pasted it. :p
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This is brilliant but there are a couple things I'd probably change: 1) "it has only been the last couple of years that she has spoken about wanting to become a dental nurse" makes it sound like she's not really been committed to it for very long. 2) At times Zadie can be seen as over ambitious and needs to 'slow down.' I think this is a bit negative and comes across as criticism, you've already said that she is ambitious so I'd probably leave that line out 3) 'pleasant personality' makes her sound a bit bland and boring, maybe say 'fantastic personality' ? I hope this has helped and sorry if it sounds really negative :)
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