what do you think of this reference? 10 points best answer!?

ok, iv never done a reference before and my mate asked me to do one for her. does this sound allright? tips would be nice. anything missing. anything else i can add to make her chances getting the job easier. she is trying to get into the british army as a dental nurse. address phone number her full name - d.o.b I have known Zadie as a friend since she was aged 10. I've known her through her family for approximately 8 years. Zadie has always mentioned wanting to become a soldier since i've known her. She has always been interested in dental too. Zadie is motivated and an enthusiastic young person who is keen to impress others but also very ambitious to gain vocations and to progress positively in a career. She is a competitive and committed in everything that she undertakes. At times Zadie can be seen as over ambitious and needs to 'slow down.'She has great communicaton skills and gets along with everyone, from the very young to elderly. She is a very gental, caring person who is very focused and good with her hands . She enjoys working with people and her pleasant personality inspires others. She is pleasant and likeable young person who is easily approachable, she is determined to succeed and i believe she will if given the opportunity. She is a hardworker who loves to learn, who works great as a part of a team. She is very capable and now needs the opportunity to develop the necessary skills to become a Soldier/Dental Nurse. I have no hesitation to recommend Zadie for the training as Royal Army Dental Corps - Soldier. Signed: . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . Date: . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . full name - work take no notice of it being untidy i copy/pasted it :p
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Well, I just found a few spelling mistakes and missing articles, nothing of the serious sort :) Zadie is a motivated and enthusiastic young person who is keen to impress others but also very ambitious to gain vocations and to progress positively in a career. She is competitive and committed in everything that she undertakes. She has great communication skills and gets along with everyone, from the very young to elderly. She is a very gentle, caring person who is very focused and good with her hands . She enjoys working with people and her pleasant personality inspires others. She is a pleasant and likeable young person who is easily approachable, and is determined to succeed. She is hardworking, loves to learn and works great as a part of a team. She is very capable and now needs the opportunity to develop the necessary skills to become a Soldier/Dental Nurse. I have no hesitation to recommend Zadie for the training as Royal Army Dental Corps - Soldier. I'm not a pro, so it might still a some flaws which I missed.
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